Of Humor and Love

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Task 2

Bahasa Indonesia

Tertukar

Engkau selalu mengirimkan pesan sapa singkatmu setiap hari. Kata-kata indah membuatku berbunga-bunga. Sampai dengan saatnya, engkau salah menyebut namaku.


English

Switched

You always send me your short greeting messages every day. The beautiful words made me blossom. Until the day, you mispronounced my name.



Reflection

I would like to tell you the story of a woman who often receives messages from her lover, with all his romantic flirting skills, the man manages to please women. Yes, not just one woman, and in the end his cover was blown.

Writing this story was a challenge for me, how I had to explain briefly what the conflict was by composing words that could describe a situation that could be understood by the reader, so as to create the right imagination.

What do you think Mrs. @solperez, what would that woman have done?

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Task 3

Bahasa Indonesia

Kehilangan

Aku terjaga di tempat tidur, merasakan sisa panas tubuhmu yang masih tertinggal. Bau parfummu menyelip di bantal, menemani malamku yang sepi. Aku tak bisa membedakan antara mimpi dan kenyataan, namun yang jelas, kehadiranmu telah menghilang. Api dalam tatapanmu telah padam, dan aku ditinggalkan dalam kebohongan dan luka. Kini, kau sedang tertawa bersamanya.


English

Lose

I wake up in bed, feeling the lingering heat of your body. The smell of your perfume slipped on my pillow, accompanying my lonely night. I couldn't distinguish between dream and reality, but clearly, your presence had disappeared. The fire in your gaze was extinguished, and I was left in lies and hurt. Now, you are laughing with him.



Reflection

The name of the fire is when the more we are close to it, the more the heat will be felt, and vice versa, when the fire is far away from us, we feel the difference in temperature that will make us feel more comfortable. However, it is different with the fire of love that slowly fades and then disappears, it hurts.

In this story, I had to internalize the content of the poem, look for the spirit contained in it, and then extract it into a short story that should not lose the main object, which in my opinion is a betrayal of love. I wanted to create an ending that creates an absolute sense of sadness.

Can you feel it, Mr. @joslud, is it okay for a man to cry?


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Hi, @fajrularifst

Subject: send author review.

Concise text, thirty words maximum. For special edition of NG magazine.
Content: What do you want to say about yourself as an author?


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Fajrul Arif, An engineer of words.
He analyzes, selects, then assembles.
His writing is inspired by the extraction of life.
For him writing is fun, where sentences must be rhythmic.

@tipu curate

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Greetings @fajrularifst

Let's move on to the assessment of tasks 2 and 3.

Task 2.

Excellent, I can see the humor, there is a title. However, you could have used elements of the telegram such as sender, recipient and subject, to evoke the format more. As I said, it's very good.

Task 3.

You condense the emotional tone of the poem and its essence very well, the feelings and emotions of betrayal, I value that it seems more prose than a poem, that was what was requested. Good job being concise. Congratulations.


Total Week 3: waiting for comments.

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