“For thy sweet love remembered such wealth brings
That then I scorn to change my state with kings.”
– William Shakespeare –
Her flowing, chestnut hair...
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Sweet Love Remembered
~by Duncan Cary Palmer~Subtly overcome,
the years and distance fall.
Inkling upon hint
compel "the big reveal."
Sluggish heart of me,
so quickened by her hand,
defibrillated, warmed, revived,
for but a paltry span.
Flowing chestnut hair,
grown out, in love, for me!
Now obscuring, now revealing
what I dare not see.
Oh, pallid Moon!
How could you fail us,
distant lovers to unite?
You've fled the scene,
to leave me naught but
fading mem'ries of delight.
~FIN~
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an interesting poem based around a Shakespearean allusion and a traditional form, but in the middle you use the term 'defibrillated' Don't think I've ever seen that before lol
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Thanks, John...
"Defibrillated..." A good, English word, is it not?
That's what you get when you cross an inventor/technologist and a poet... ;)
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Wonderful piece of poetry , Well done @creatr keep on sharing and best of luck for future too
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Thank you, kind sir.
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Great poem, as I am a sucker for love! Look out for my romance/dating tips a bit later today.
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Thank you, Hope.
We're all "suckers for love." It makes the world go 'round, right? ;)
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I feel as if I've cheated having read your recent post, "How the mighty have fallen". Are they related? I liked how you described the feelings in there, and I felt that the cadence (and the change in cadence in particular) helped to accentuate those feelings. Nice write.
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Hey, Moe,
Thanks so much for visiting here and interacting...
Related only in that both reflect on lost loves... and so the feelings are authentic. ;)
I consider myself a "hacker poet," but once in a while things seem to work. Thanks for noticing the change in cadence at the end there... :D
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Beautiful and melancholy poem @creatr! Good choice.
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Thanks, my friend. Melancholy indeed...
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Nice poem @creatr. Thanks for sharing. Upvoted.
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Thank you! :)
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You got me on this one. Indeed romantic but sad too. Beautifully done @creatr. A pleasure to read!
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Thanks, Troy. :D
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@oiginalworks
Soo romantic...
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Thanks, my friend.
Did you mean @originalworks?
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Oh I did indeed - I was far too dreamy after reading your poem... :)
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This is emotional and it expresses the author's most deep feelings.....great write up creatr
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Thanks for your visit and sweet comments. :)
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Sweet romantic lines. Is there any intended allusion to Eastern myth about a figure residing in the moon to unite lovers? I forget. It may be a rabbit. It's sad a heart needing life inserted yet living perhaps too long
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Thank you, @oneazania, for taking the time to read and reflect on my poem.
The moon is often a theme of star-crossed lovers... no specific intended allusion here, other than the fact that lovers separated by a great distance can still observe the same moon at the same time...
Thanks again for your comments! :D
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Indeed, we're a starry-eyed lot
Who bare this lot ;-)
The pleasure is mine
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thanks for sharing keep it up
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