hey man. look forward to more poetry. the short lines add breath and time to reflect on each line as well as a sense of urgency. is this intended? either way, it paints a vivid - yet casual picture of the human barrier and threat of violence that protects the state. I myself have reflected "am i being paranoid? dramatic?" i say always question the systems people take for granted - its the only way the world can progress. cheers!
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Thanks man, I didn't intend for that.
I was trying to write it somewhat minimalist without actually turning it into a minimalist poem and I ended the lines where I would have for a minimalist poem.
I wrote this poem about the guards that I kept running into at the French border and also about me coming to terms with being forced out of Britain in a month.
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