'The Invisibles' - an Original Poemlazarus-wist (54) in poetry • 7 years ago two dogs in the streetsparring over a chicken carcass the street an alleyturning behindshopfronts, huggingthe brick wallwalls from a back door stepthe immigrant boywatches his apron specked with grey ash his father callingfrom the counter but who elsewatching? a dozen black birds shifting in the eaves look down, calculating an angle the townie mammal picks through old cans a maggot clingingto the chicken Image poetry poem writing isleofwrite poverty
Like this - its unusual and I had to get my head around where it was taking me - which is why I like it
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Thanks Andrew - I appreciate the feedback. It's true, I often like to make a reader work at a poem. Oftentimes the reward is that much sweeter, I just hope I don't scare people away! Cheers.
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Well it works well for me, chicken or no chicken ;-)
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Nothing illustrates the practical desperation of life quite like the alleyways of a city. Well crafted m8.
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Thanks, it sure is a hard world out there. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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