Dear @majowrites,
The story looks great, It is not that easy to write or in other way not every on in the world have the talents for writing, singing, painting etc or more precisely God will bless with such talents only with special peoples, So you can be proud that you are one among them.
The three captions you had given in the picture is good enough to understand the plot, a family business, the father is passing away after making it big, then the sons taking over, they were getting married, the new wives are creating problems leading to big fights and seperation, then in between a villain or anti hero in the form of a family friend or an accountant of the business firm. Then some one realizing that the fight does not make anyone's life better or they were having misunderstanding for the problem that caused and at the end making a happy ending. I am not sure as I just made a point.
A gone through your story and it is worth a read for. The family bonding between the brothers and at the time of father's serious illness was a good plot too.
Finally I have a suggetion for you if you don't mind, The writ up can be break in between like paragraphs in between the major events in the story or you can give some space in between those particular points. You could also give a brief introduction about the first part and its link.
Then will it be continues , then that also can be mentioned. Any how appreciate your effort and talent. Congratulations for the curie selection. Cheers
Thank you so much for your kind words on my story and writing, it means so much! I hope you enjoy the rest of it, too :)
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