100 Days of Poetry / Day 14 - If you feel me / Ako me razumiješ - Original poetry / art

- If you feel me -
Original poem by
Mr. Spacely

Follow me if you feel me,
it will be easier to believe me
Thug life is not my choice,
it's just my inner voice
Trying to speak aloud
paint what's this World about.

I'm still seeking the truth,
still getting all the looks
I don't deserve.
So, I remain quite reserved
in speaking my mind.
Somedays it seems like I'm just wasting time.

WIll I fall in the line
or will they mold me,
try to capture my mind then distort it?
No, I'm not of the same,
I'm not really like them.
Something separates me...
Is it my heart or ma brain?

Yeah, I really don't care,
all I wish you:
Be well.

Don't let others call you names. Be yourself and try to grow no matter the circumstances. You will be laughed at, but it's the thing that most people are jealous. So, don't be like them and don't listen to their words. Keep your smile on and speak your mind from your heart, always! Be unique, find your own way and put flowers all around!
Yes, I'm gonna say that I'm a thug 'cause I came from the gutter, and I'm still here. I'm not saying I'm a thug 'cause I'm gonna rob you or rape you. - 2pac

- Ako me razumiješ -
Original poem by
Mr. Spacely

Pođi s menom, ako me razumiješ,
biti će ti lakše vjerovati čuda.
Drugačiji život nije moj izbor,
samo moj uzdah duše,
želi pričati na glas
i dočarati ono što se događa.

Dok tražim istinu,
pogledi sivi nadvijaju se nad mnom,
kao da ih zaslužiti želim
Pa se ne trudim puno
da objasnim stanje
i nekad' mi pari da vrijeme gubim ja.

Želim li se opustiti
da isti postanem k'o oni,
koji žele iskriviti vrijednosti moje
Al' ja nisam k'o drugi,
možda dijele me neki detalji
kod mene um i duša, sami se zbroje

Ali nije me briga,
samo želim da znate:
Slušajte srce, zanemarite što znate.

Original Poetry and Art
by
Mr. Spacely

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I know, no worries ;)

These lines made me laugh in RL

Thug life is not my choice,
it's just my inner voice

tupac yes ?

All in all a fun enjoyable read i have the feeling that it snags in a few parts flow wise in the english version though and if you don't throw rotten tomatoes ar me and would be interested in what this old hag has to say let me know ;)It really isn't much it is an apostrophe here and a word taken there ... :)

hahaha well, I'm glad I made you laugh!! Just speak your mind, I am listening everything and thinking about it! I am new in poetry so any suggestion/help/critique is nice!

yeee tupac motivated me for this one :) :) what can I say. I listen to Johnny Cash and Tupac hahaaha and maaany mooore :D

romantic, beautiful poetry and captivating reader, interesting and comfortable reading vocabulary, thanks for sharing @whack.science if wishing to visit my blog, I also post the latest poem, thank you

Thansk bro. I visited, very nice poetry. Keep going, see you on the 100th day :D :D

paint you what's this World about.
I'm still seeking for the truth,

Hey Mr. Spacely Oh, another great poem. I think the above two lines could be helped by a little editing. There may be others as well. But I'll just focus on these two for now. I think if you took out the word 'you' from the first line it would be better served. Also take out the word 'for' on the second line. It makes it awkward. Just my two cents. See you in class.

Thanks, Steve... I edited it. Thanks again for stopping by and helping the new ones in poetry! See you in class!

No problem. Thank YOU!