Your story poses an interesting moral dilemma. Larry is certainly thrust into the middle ground where either choice made will leave one side hurt.
The narration however needs some improvement. I suggest you mind the following
your use of tenses (present, present continuous, and past...). For example [(a. present)..life has been difficult for him...((b. past)...She came across him by the ...)].
Also mind the spelling and punctuation. This may seem trivial, but they can inconvenience the reading of an otherwise good story
Cheers my friend.
Thanks for the observation. Noted.
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