Adverbs are an easy way of describing something. But like dialogue tags, they suffer from overuse. You could compare adverbs to nutmeg--best used in moderation. Extreme moderation.
Let’s Have a Closer Look
First of all. I had to look up what an adverb is. Wait, no. That came out wrong. I know what an adverb is in Dutch. But I can’t really edit an English writer and say, “Hmmm. Not a fan of that bijwoord over there.”
I imagine some other ESL writers might have a similar problem so let’s first look at the definition of an adverb. It’s basically a word that modifies anything other than a noun. It can modify a verb, an adjective or another adverb.
She walked quickly.
The adverb quickly applies to the verb to walk.
He made a remarkably observant comment.
The adverb remarkably applies to the adjective observant.
He spoke frustratingly slowly.
The adverb frustratingly applies to the second adverb slowly.
The Hunt for Adverbs
If you’re having trouble identifying an adverb, try to look for the words that end with -ly. Most of those are adverbs, but there are other adverbs without that ending, such as very or just.
Another way to look for them is by analysing your sentence. Look at the verb. Does it stand alone or do you have a word that helps define the verb?
Look at the other words. Which of the words in your sentence have “sidekicks” and do they really need them? Maybe you could replace the word with a better “superhero” that doesn’t need a sidekick?
Burn Them with Fire
Now that we’ve affirmed that adverbs are what they are, let’s talk about why we don’t like them. I see you all rolling your eyes. Here she comes with another thing she doesn’t want us to do. By the time she’s done, there will be nothing left we’re actually allowed to use.
Listen to someone who isn’t me, and who said this long before I thought about writing:
Adverbs are the tool of the lazy writer.
Mark Twain said that. I could kiss him. For that alone.
Why exactly are adverbs such a problem? Because the use of an adverb is a way to tell your reader what happens. Let’s look at that more closely.
He walked slowly down the street.
He sauntered down the street.
Which of these sentences feels more like telling? Which of the sentences gives you, as a reader, the stronger image? Is the first one easier to do? Definitely. The second is making me think about how my character looks as he walks down the street. But which one gives me a better result?
But, Tiny, what if we need to modify a verb?
If you pick the right verb, you won’t have to modify it. Can I refer to my example? Walking can be done in many ways. Slowly, quickly. Sort of random or with a purpose. You can saunter, amble, march or stroll. If you choose a verb that already tells your reader more about what happens, you don’t need that adverb that Mr. Twain and I don’t like.
And you know what? A powerful verb that can stand on its own without the crutch of an adverb to lend it meaning will often provide your reader with a much more vivid image.
Let’s Not Start a Witch Hunt
Let’s make one thing clear: I’m not going to outlaw all use of adverbs. But like everything, I’ll ask you whether you truly need it. And be honest with yourself when answering that one.
I have a draft sitting in my Google drive with a certain adverb in it. It has been poking my eye out for over a month now and I suspect I may have to live with it. I can’t find a way around it.
She raised her eyelids so slowly it would be hard to see the movement.
I cannot find a strong verb that gives me that description. If you know one, please share it with me.
As always, dear reader, I hope this post helps you as much as it has helped me. Again, forcing me to think about something hard enough to fill up a post has been an eye opener. If Mark Twain and I have helped even one of you think twice about the adverbs you use in your prose, our work has not been in vain.
Hugs
Tiny
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Wow. Thank you so much. I'm honoured to be included!
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Good things to think about! I teach college level French, including writing, and though I spend most of my time teaching students how to use a dictionary, or how to avoid the passive voice in every sentence...it's kind of the same. Let's look for a better verb! A verb with some power. As someone who likes to write and craft the best sentence I can, I enjoy that process, but unfortunately, students think I'm just obsessive...oh well! I do what I can to encourage quality writing - in any language! Cheers
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Indeed. Keep on preaching it, sister. At the Writers' Block, we are lucky to be preaching to people who actually want to hear this. That makes it a bit easier. ;-)
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She raised her eyelids so slowly it would be hard to see the movement.
perhaps:
She raised her eyelids like a sunrise over the ocean; a blush of movement unnoticed, even when staring directly into it.
I am enjoying this series so much! Keep 'em coming!
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Thank you John. But here, the modifier is a sentence. I'm looking for something more minimalist for that particular scene. Would love to discuss it with you with more context if and when you feel up to it.
Can I steal this for another one though?
Next TT is planned tonight actually. ;-)
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It is yours to use or discard!
I will try to be there... :/
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“Burn Them With Fire.” XD
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I hear that pitchforks and torches can be quite effective as well.
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Well I am truly and most definitely guilty of using lots of unsightly adverbs throughout my writing (and speech). Case in point ;)
Seriously though, it's a good reminder that there are are a wealth of other verbs out there. Time to bust out that thesaurus!
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Good luck. And thank you for your kind comment. ;-)
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I greatly appreciate your carefully written post with stunningly accurate information. A sentence 27% adverbs for the win. @ironsheild
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Well. The inclusion of that many adverbs is an art in itself. But. Here it comes: do you need them? ;-)
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"I appreciate your well written post for its accurate information."
I guess I didn't need all those adverbs after all.
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Great work, Tiny, as usual. I need to do more work on torching my own adverbs...
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We all do, Bex. They're too easy to use as a crutch.
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I was reading a writing book by Stephen King and when it got to the part about adverbs, I was a little discouraged since -ly words are often my favorite & pepper my language and first drafts.
But, you're both right and the writing is stronger without them. Now when I read a story adverbs glare out me almost as much as anything but the word "said" when people are talking. Breaking that habit has changed my writing, since I didn't realize how lazy I was being & given me a pet peeve as a reader. Bonus!
Now I must Google "dialogue tags" and see what other writing faux pas I make! 😆
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I have an article on those. You can find it by clicking on my banner and looking at my library section. ;-)
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And thank you for your kind and encouraging comment. :-D
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i really have trouble mastering this. :3
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You're not alone. That's exactly why I wrote this article. ;-)
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thank you for this. at least i can practice it and study it clearly because you explain it in a way that the readers can easily comprehend it. :)
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Thank you very much. That is a beautiful compliment to receive, and the reason I write these posts. Good luck and happy writings!
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Thanks for this post @tinyplaeokitchen, I'm frustratingly guilty of using these lazy words, very disappointing!! Luckily I can avoid them more easily now that I know how stupidly lazy they are.
Slowly but surely!!
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Did that came out right?
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Well, I remember telling you about them before, Ahmad, in editing notes. ;-)
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Yup, I kinda remember that too...
You're right that they are lazy, because they are the first things that come to my mind when describing.
The comment above had intentional overuse of them. But in all my serious posts you'll find a huge amount of [PutSomethingHere]ly words.
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This is good tips for adverb use. I always thought my writing seemed a bit lazy, and now I know why!
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