[Short Story] Debut

in writing •  7 years ago 


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“You don’t have to be ashamed” the gurgling mass assures me. “About...the things coming out of your body”. Its half formed little arm sensually traces the spot where a bundle of greasy black hoses passes through its skin, puffy and red all around it. “I have...things...coming out of my body too.”

A baby’s scream pierces the thick, humid air, barely discernible over a loud siren. Shattered glass cylinders all around, revealed sporadically in silhouette by flickering lights. Men in gas masks travel down the rows with hammers, smashing the cylinders that are still intact, spilling their contents into the ever-deepening soup.

The screaming suddenly stops. I search frantically for some explanation but cannot get up. My limbs, feeble imitations of what they should be, splash the foetal muck about but do nothing to move me.

A maddening itching sensation surrounds the points on my chest where black hoses penetrate into it, but I haven’t the fingers with which to scratch. “It’s...not supposed to be this way” I sputter. It looks at once quizzical and mournful. “Oh? How is it…’supposed’ to be?”

Another loud smash, and a baby’s wail. The men with the hammers abruptly silence it, moving methodically down the rows. My tears mix freely with the amniotic fluid as one of the uniformed men, drenched in it from the waist down, arrives at our row.

“You know” the bulbous headed creature with the malformed little arm coos, “I always thought you were pretty.” It reaches over with its distorted, knobbly paw and caresses my ribcage. “I would’ve said something, but we were in different tanks.” I recoil from his touch, shuddering as the man with the hammer finally reaches me.


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Oh, that one again. It's really creepy. As I remember there were more.
It was a golden age of creepy stories heh :d

Owh mehn this looks like one of these sci Fi horror movies from the past. I got so glued to this piece that at a point I actually thought I was seeing a movie...can't wait to see a sequel.

i feel very bad for read this short story.
the gurgling mass also assures me.

What the actual hell. Not only the story is creepy but that woman on the photo scared the shit on me, seriously :DD
That was cool!

I love these little vignettes where you paint a whole picture of a terrifying world in a few short paragraphs. Brilliant.

I'll have to do more of these. I think I told you my original plan for this piece was to follow "Oh? How is it 'supposed' to be?" with the girl describing wholesome pioneer life growing up in a cabin on the hillside for like 10 pages

That sounds really lovely. I kind of want a wholesome pioneer existence but the whole being allergic to everything and avoiding direct sunlight has me rethinking that homestead fantasy.

The two love birds @alexbeyman @amandarichards having a great a good great discussion... Hehe keep it on..

Haha. And we are all like awww :)

Haha truly we are like aww.. Anyways God bless both of them. They make a wonderful couple..

I love these short stories.
It’s your next big thing Alex.

  ·  7 years ago (edited)

Something went wrong. That’s why these man started smashing the glass cylinders and whatever came out of it they smashed as well. They were coming closer and closer to him, some know kind of creature or mutant, who is telling this story until...

Your stories are impeccable.
I got Goosebumps reading this.
Can't wait for it's sequel

The screaming suddenly stops.

Mine didn't. I'm still screaming after reading this. Where in your head do these come from ?

Bad dreams mostly.

The truth is out there...

Now we are going to be haunted by @alexbeyman... You can do anything. I must admit you are a master..

There is one thing though , you like pain , in most of your serious write ups , its there

Pains, scary stuffs and a little out of this world ideas. But I love it. I am learning from his method of writing and will improve on my own fiction. Though, not on pains.

You were true, he is gem out here

Yea i told you, i get vibes somehow

The stories were very good, every tale of the findings was found because the stories were so beautiful

This story was very difficult, that is, the child survived, crying for the little boycott of the story, which is very painful

The story of the story given by you is very difficult to think of that baby boy, shouting in this incident,

Your news was a lot better and your posts were much better

Amazing story..Upvote resteemit done..✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌

i don't know sometimes i feel like that. but can't find the reason. the things coming out of my body

Is this the expression of your master's poetry.

I don't know what to really type out as a comment. I almost din't type anything so I just as well not type anything meaningful.

If this somehow happens to me, my chest would burst up, and my heart would come out of mouth, nohhhhh