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Great! Fantastic

Thank you!

very cool post and vlog, i like it

Funny!! Good post

Since you left a comment on my post and asked for feedback, I'll give you my preliminary observations.

You can write but I'm not sure this would work as a children's book - there's readability issues and I'm not sure if this is children's literature or YA. What is your target audience? Have you researched anything about writing for your target age group? Also, this sample relies heavily on adjectives...those are my initial impressions

Firstly, thank you for getting back to me. I think that maybe my target audience is more teen age group rather than children so I will look into changing that. I definitely agree that I use a lot of adjectives, so I will come them down in my next piece. Once again, thanks for the advice.

Great writing @maxy-hopkins - keep it up :)

I got interested when you started writing about the book and how many time's he's read it. Maybe there was too much information at the start with the leaf but I can see how it may be important to the story. You will do great things.