I’ve put a hold on the writing tips for the moment. I’m going to a car show and won’t have the time to put into the posts.
I’ve just had what I believe is a brilliant idea (I reserve the right to change my mind on that at any time).
Read this story and have a think on whether it’s a memory or a figment of my imagination - or a mixture of both.
For clarification - torch = flashlight - sorry for the confusion here.
When I was around twelve years old or so, we played with the kids on the street and the streets close-by – around twenty kids at full-strength. Sometimes, the games were SO easy to organise. They just fell together and everyone had fun without getting into too much trouble.
Other times, it wasn’t so good. If the older kids came to influence the games, sometimes it could get a little… dark.
We lived close to an old house, with high, stone walls surrounding it. We could see the chimneys over the wall and if we were feeling a little adventurous, we’d boost each other up so we could see the gardens.
Up the little lane, onto our street, if I turned left instead of going straight on, I could see my great-grandma’s home. She lived in a bungalow in a small collection of other bungalows built for the elderly.
She lived at the bottom of that particular road, but I’m not going that far on this tale.
Two bungalows from the little lane, there lived an old couple. Both died within months of each other and for once, the bungalow stood empty for more than a few weeks.
Summer holidays had just started, the full collective of the kids gathered on the park and the older kids, full of excitement because of the summer holidays, decided it was time for an initiation ceremony.
We were all for it of course! It sounded like a great time…
We got rid of the smaller kids and those with limited athletic ability and it ended up that I was one of the youngest. Three others younger than me and all three had their older sibling to guide them. I’m the oldest in my family and my younger brother and sister were persuaded to leave that particular adventure and go off with the other younger kids.
I can’t imagine what it looked like when around twelve of us snuck into the back garden of the empty bungalow. We must have been spotted, we were not cat-burglars by any stretch.
Without a word, the three biggest lads and one brother younger than me started climbing the old stone wall that surrounded the old house. It was easy-going, the stones made a great climbing surface, plenty of hand and foot-holds.
Two sat on top of the wall to help anyone to the top and over. They had torches with them and in the gloom of twilight, the lights helped as we dropped over the wall. It may have crossed my mind that the idea may not have been as spontaneous as we’d first thought – why were they carrying torches if the idea just occurred to them?
Two others stood at the bottom on the other side to catch us as we dropped.
What we didn’t see at the time, was the wall on the other side was smooth and neat – no hand or foot-holds.
When everyone had made it to the ground, we split into three groups – one of the big lads headed each team – and went off in separate directions.
The group I was part of headed for the outbuildings.
One faded blue door hung off its hinges and we could see right inside. An old car stood off to one side of the massive garage. Covered in dust and droppings, the paintwork burgundy and cream, the headlamps pitted with rust and I thought that car was beautiful.
We couldn’t hang around to look at it though, and we certainly could NOT touch it! Off we went to the next out building.
We could hear hushed whispers and excited voices. Then other voices calling out harsh instructions to be quiet.
We came upon one of the other groups at the opposite end of the outbuildings and two of the girls in the group were crying. We didn’t know what had happened.
The very oldest lad, the one that had suggested we all go on this adventure came out of the barn. His face glowed bright in the moonlight, he had gone that pale.
“We’ve got to get out of here,” he said. He pushed his younger brother before him as he went. The brother, full of bravado because he’d been chosen as stand-in for the older lad that hadn’t made it that evening, jinked sideways and dodged his brother’s guiding hand.
He slipped into the barn, flicked on the torch and a couple of us slipped past the older lad to follow the youngest of our group. His older brother had gone really quiet and usually, he would have reacted with a cuff round the ear for his little brother when he disobeyed instructions, but not this time.
Danny was easy to follow, his torchlight shone in the gathering darkness. When it finally stopped and trained on something in the corner of the barn, we scrambled forward to see what he’d found.
I wish we hadn’t.
Danny fumbled with the torch, trying to click it off. Then he realised he could move the beam off the object and he swung the light back the way we’d come. I think I was the only one of us that saw what Danny saw.
“Andy?” he said, calling for his brother. “Andy?”
I turned around to look back at the doorway of the barn. There seemed to be more light than when we came in.
“Get out! Quick! Someone’s coming, we’ve got to get away!”
We ran for the door, the sight of what Danny had found wiped from our minds for the moment.
Rather than heading back to the wall, the way we’d come in, we followed the leaders to the end of the drive. A gate hung askew, not quite as dilapidated as the garage door with that beautiful old car.
Why we’d not come in that way was anyone’s guess. I suppose they wanted to make it more exciting for us. But they weren’t anticipating the find at the end.
Things were subdued when we got out of the grounds and went back up the little lane to the safety of our street. Everyone dispersed. My mum shouted me in. She’d been looking for me for ages and was angry. I didn’t want to risk making her angrier by telling her where we’d been – or what we’d seen.
Andy’s best friend, also Danny, overdosed. He’d died in the barn. Andy didn't come out very often after that night.
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The answer to the question of Fact or Fiction? Is here:
https://steemit.com/writing/@michelle.gent/fact-or-fiction-2
Don't know why people say it's a nice story, it's quite harrowing and could easily be fact.
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Because they haven't bothered to read it. Too much spamming to do.
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I do not have enough time to read the basic stories. So I read this, it's pretty sad and I hope that it is completely fictional. But from the point of view of writing - written qualitatively.
In the evening I will read the previous posts.
Thank you and have a good day
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The Answer
Thank you for reading and commenting. I hope this answers your questions from yesterday's post ;)
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That story is very detailed but something tells me that there is a catch. So I think that this is "mixture of both". Memories from childhood that are seasoned with a bit of imagination sauce :)
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Great observation!
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No not a nice story (like the spam comments say) but certainly an interesting and well told story. I think it is a bit of both fact and fiction - but i reserve the right to change my mind.
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Thank you. You have good observation skills.
The answer, on the following day's post, has been linked above.
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Seems like a true story; perhaps you've used your imagination when describing the actual place where it happened...and torches, never seen kids with torches.
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Flashlights :)
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Ah, I didn't know that torch = flashlights, my English is so bad :(
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I've only just read this and haven't read part 2 yet. My pick is true up to a point, then devolving into fiction. Off to find out now.
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I would say it is fiction. Or a mixture. Or maybe i am wishing it is. This is actually a very dark reading. Bitter.
I am truly wishing it is fiction, yeah.
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Figment, at least I hope so :0/
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Wow. I knew there'd be a twist at the end, but wasn't expecting that. Knowing you, it's entirely plausible this story is fact. On the other hand, knowing you, it's also very possible it's either a figment, or a blend of fact and fiction. Which doesn't answer your question at all, lol. Well done!
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I think this is a pretty harrowing experience. I reread it several times. I think this story is a mixture of fact and fiction. Part memories and part embellishment of those memories. If I am wrong than you have had a very traumatic experience as a 12 year old...
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huhhhhhhhhhhhh lol you scared me. btw how many years ago this tragedy happen to you guys????
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Crikey...
have a nice time at the car show!
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Thanks for sharing your childhood adventures story with us in a great style.
Thank you so much for writing this.
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Enjoy the vote and reward!
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we can not care in our fact_fiction. even childhood adventures.but we should care these. so thank you for your post.
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Its nice post sharing @michelle.gent
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Quite depressing at the end.
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heyyyyyy how you been? been a while since we last chatted.
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Yes I totally gain this knowledge ..You great explain to keep of fiction Or fact..I totally i appreciate dear.
Carry on your activity ..😊😊😊😊
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Woow...
Nice post.. thanks for sharing.. 😊😊
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we can not mind in our fact fiction. Indeed, even adolescence adventures.But we should mind these.
Carry on my friend
Upvoted annd resteemed
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Interesting.
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Heeummm...
It story good enough.
It impressed me in that story way.
Goood..
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Great trip
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Because this is a very challenging adventure and you have been voted one of the best to fill the place as a natural challenger
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Your memoir is full of adventure and suspense. I think it's a glimpse of living a life filled with excitement of being young.
I must acknowledge it's a bit frightening to me. Young lads shouldn't be in such pursuits.
Thank you for providing us a look into your good old days.
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Oh man, a scary ..... harrowing story .. Are you sure it all just happened to you. ?
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and you know a few days ago here in our city a dreadful incident happened to some guys during the summer camp. there was a mango tree which was full of Ghosts. and during the training, they cutted down that tree. after that when they went to sleep. I can't tell in words. they had been injured very badly. some of them had fractured their hands and some of them had fractured their feet.
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LOL at:
I thing this is imagination, not a memory - because of the torches, who really uses torches (even some decades ago)? Am I right?
Cheers! : )
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My fault! Torch = flashlight.
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If you used the word "flashlight", I would think that it's a true story. : )
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But I'm English and to use the word 'flashlight' would make it untrue because we don't use that word, we call them 'torches'.
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Oh, sorry, my mistake, didn't know that. Small English - US language differences are sometimes fascinating.
In this case, I think that your story is a true experience. Am I right? : )
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Partly so. The answer is linked above, on the following day's post.
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Your story is very nice Thank you for sharing such a nice story with us
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Which part is nice? The ending?
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childhood is the time when every talent is created.so we should take care of childhood
thanks for sharing.....
carry on
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That is nice story....
I am pleaser for this...
Carry on your activity best wish to you......
I wish you will contineu the writing
best of luck
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Maybe you should read the stories I write because there's not many that are nice.
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Yes, sometimes we meet with people with excellent reading abilities, like 25 pages per minute.
I envy those who can read 20 posts per hour, make analysis, write their comments and etc.
All I can manage is to read max 10 posts per day. write max 3 :)
While I am commenting, want to underline that I have not read this post yet.
True facts about Steemit
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hahahahhaha slap on his face. lol :P :D
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