Petal's Edge

in writing •  7 years ago 

Petal's Edge

 
Over the edge and into the abyss, the sigh of the sun fell
Nothing wanted nor amiss, tiptoeing forward an empty shell
An ear of a friend to hear, nothing needed but life craves
Pressing send and like spear, headlong in and under waves

New, old, borrowed and blue, married to a world unchosen
In the shadows none knew, mind heart and soul were unfrozen
Sharp the edge glistened, glinting in the light of waning moon
If only they listened, much later it would have been than soon

Choices are made on the small, and little there is any can say
Headlong the rushing fall, as echoes chase with begs to stay
Too late it all arrived, depths dragged from height of ledge
Dark ate after the dive, or was it a fall from the petal's edge.

Taraz
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I am very surprised @tarazkp, this is the first time i am seeing you do poetry and your poetry is awesome. What i enjoyed most is the rhymes, they show creativity. And how you ended the poem with the title is cool too. Should we expect more poetry from you??😁 @tarazkp

I generally write a few a week these days, one yesterday at least. It depends how I feel at the time.

Wow. You write amazing poetry, who would have known? I love your writing about the factual and your observations. You are extremely talented. Great macro as well. Did you have to use something to attract the bug or was it just chance? I remember seeing the photograph that you took not long ago with honey on a flower petal. If I recall, you said that you were trying to attract ants so you felt that you cheated when you took the photograph. It was beautiful either way. Nothing wrong with setting the stage.

It just happened to be sitting there on the petal. Normally I don't cheat ;)

I know you don't. I gathered that from your other post. 😊

wow, amazing camera with amazing hand.
you know how to take a great macro picture.
I love this picture.

Truly amazing capture !

Lol. I look at your photo's a little differently now. Was that a bug you grabbed and put on the petal?

No, he was just sitting there considering to end it all.

The Poem seems to be of a light to isolation I guess you aiming at it....... It potrays unwanted in an unwanted world.

this one is very beautiful @tarazkp.these are very nice word that you choose and feelingfull.

a really beautiful and very detailed poem about how beautiful is the formation of a petalo to thousands creating beautiful flowers

Wow, so beautiful. I love your word choice and imagery; this was so soft and breezy like to me when I first read it, but then glimmers of something quite different upon further inspection. Loved it, thanks. It's really very well written!

Ain't that the truth
If I only got into steemit when it was 0.08

  ·  7 years ago (edited)

Extraordinary picture, capturing that right moment, accompanied by an interesting compilation of words that give strength to the exposed image. Thanks for exposing your work.