Fatso The Great Fighter

in hive-167622 •  3 years ago  (edited)
Good morning to the entire steemalive community. Today I am go to start a story I composed myself after much argument with my thoughts. So I hope you will engage with it, that how I can make a go story that every one will love. Thank you

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The village of ogudada was blessed by God and is known for many good skills, some of which were large scale farming, fishing hunting and the presence of great fighters. the village of ogudada was obviously a commercial town because of their richness in farm produce. People from neighboring village usually come to purchase their need or sort for job opportunities.

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At the east side of the village close to the forest lives a man in his late 20s named fatso. Not that he is fat but He is known as the great fighter and the village champion because be has won many fight competition in his village and for his village. Fatso is a tall and handsome man of every women of ogudada's dream. He has a great shape because he work out so he can be fit for fighting. While some women die for his looks, others die for his pocket as he was wealthy, wealth which he acquired by throwing punches at a fellow man

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Fatso have two wives and three children. His first wife was from his hometown ogudada, while the other wife was a trophy he won and accepted during a fight competition at a neighboring village.

On a cold evening fatso was engaged in a fighting competition in his village. There was a huge crowd that was present to see the fight. While the fight was on among the crowd was people who did not only come to see the fight, but they also can to see who was kind enough to gift them their belongings, they were pickpockets. Fatao took some good punches but it was not enough to put him down, then he gave his opponent a punch in the nose that knock him out and won the fight.

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On the occasion of his victory, the crowd went wild and there was a certain lady that was unlucky and fell to the ground and the pick pocket was trying to make away with her bag but she hold on to it while screeming for help. The wild crowd did not show concern but fatso heard and came to her aid, He gave the pick pocket a rocky punch that made got his face swollen. Fatso bent to help the lady and was struck to his core by her beauty. 6 months later she became fatso's wife.

The way fatso and his wife Delilah meet was a shock to almost every one in ogudada, even to me as the author. The rumors were that delilah used a spell on fatso that's why he ended up marring her. People said that delilah will make fatso to start losing his fights, but that was not the case, she was not the delilah in the Bible. Instead fatso was still winning his fights and Delilah was expecting a child for fatso...



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Expect episode 2
I hope to see your engagement with this story so I can know how to continue

All of us are saying "we can't wait for the next episode. Who doesn't love reading.

Nice post from you here @lovveday

Thank you very much for your comment. I appreciate it

Wow that's awesome story from you. I am anticipating the episode 2. It's very interesting one. I want to know if the Delilah letter give birth to Fasto

Well, I take it as a suggestion which I just started to consider. We'll see as the story come out

Hi @lovveday

I love your story, it's so interesting.
I can see that fatso was a great fighter and he has good skills..

he gave his opponent a punch in the nose that knock him out and won the fight.

What a great fighter, a man with skills and a man that don't play with chances..

some women die for his looks, others die for his pocket..

Woman also die for people like that, because some will say that this man can be able to defend me when am in trouble. And some will be carried away be wealth..

A man like fatso attracts danger, why? Because he fights and not all fight want fatso come out victor, them might assassinate him or kill his family to send a message. Don't you think women think this too narrowly in that aspect?

This a a beautiful piece and I enjoyed reading, I love the Delilah twist.

The way fatso and his wife Delilah meet was a shock to almost every one in ogudada, even to me as the author

😁😁yea most things come as a shock to even the writer. Inspiration I guess.

I can’t wait for episode two💪🏾.

Episode 2 is on its way. The delilah twist will get more interesting I hope

One.thing that will keep your writers wanting more.is suspense. Don't dish out all your cards. I encourage you to keep writing as practice makes perfection. Also read those of other writers,one such place for that is the @writingnreviews community @lovveday

Surely. Am new to this, it pretty obvious. but I am trying to give out something i found in me recently

That's great. It's good to develop our talents. @lovveday I'll keep an eye out for your stories. I also hope you don't mind a critical mind once or twice

Interesting story about Fatso and his wife delilah.
Thank God he came to the rescue of that lady who was almost robbed.
Anticipating the second episode dear

It will come out soon. Sorry for the delay

While some women die for his looks, others die for his pocket as he was wealthy, wealth which he acquired by throwing punches at a fellow man

@lovveday, i wonder why people love money despite the source of income. Please tell ogudada to be kind to people. Nice writeup

Without money in today's world, you will look like an alien so everyone work hard either good or bad way to acquire the money.

I will surely tell the people of ogudada in one of the episode

Thank you for the comment

Be careful before those women will beat

I love your story and I wish to see the continuation

I will continue ma. I just had some setback. But I will continue

Ok, sorry for the past

The name Delilah when mention med brings a reflection of what happened to Sampson in the Bible. I love your story @lovveday.

I hope to have the episode2 soonest. Thanks for sharing.

I actually didn't plan to bring the delilah name, but I saw a bible that made me reflected on samson and delilah. It was just an inspiration I used

Hi @lovvday,

First off,I will commend you for being very active on Steemit.Your passion is second to none.I really enjoyed reading your story.Fatso is a very strong man.I love his strength and body build up.I just hope Delilah won't destroy him in future.😀

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😂😂😂 what the future holds for this story, even I don't know. Am not writing as am a good writer or I have been writing before. It just fun to me so even a comment from this episode one could be an inspiration for coming episodes

I hope you don't mind if I offer some suggestions. This isn't a criticism but it would make it easier to read. The first is to watch the letter case on your words. You call him fatso but also Fatso. You call the village ogudada. Is it normal to write it ogudada or Ogudada?

The second thing is the font.

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I realize now that you wrote that section parenthetically. In that case, you wouldn't reduce the size of the font. When you write parenthetically (like the text within these parenthesis), it allows the reader to ignore that section. It shouldn't be important information.

Very well composed story from you @lovveday.

So he won one of his wives as a trophy from wrestling, that's quite funny though. I'll be awaiting chapter 2.
Don't forget to mention me on it because I'll love to read.

He won his 2nd wife yes. I Will mention you as your rightly asked

Fatso must really be a skillful warrior o like Sampson in the bible 😂😂
I'll love to read the episode 2. Very interesting bro

Episode 2 is loading already, sorry for the delay. I was caught up with some setback

On a cold evening fatso was engaged in a fighting competition in his village. There was a huge crowd that was present to see the fight. While the fight was on among the crowd was people who did not only come to see the fight, but they also can to see who was kind enough to gift them their belongings, they were pickpockets. Fatao took some good punches but it was not enough to put him down, then he gave his opponent a punch in the nose that knock him out and won the fight.

That felt like a climax of the story, I really liked the story, waiting for episode 2

Episode 2 is on its way

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The story of this great man iguana is interesting @lovveday, I will love to read part 2 of it to see what happened to him, his wives and children most interesting delilah