Hi,
First of all, thank you for making this elaborate comment to help me improve!
But there are somethings that I disagree with, for example:
You say that there is no need to add past translation experience but the template shows otherwise - "- Languages
List the source and target languages in this contribution. Be sure to also provide some insight on your expertise and translation experience in these languages."
Since it is a first contribution I think it wouldnt make sense adding links to other contributions that have nothing to do with this one.
In Portuguese from Portugal we don't usually translate names, unlike brasilian Portuguese...
I do agree on the number of words, I will keep that in mind next time.